tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-555274650815496201.post4659371496007337302..comments2023-07-05T05:03:33.255-04:00Comments on Publish, or Perish!: Just a part of one of my stories-Ghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14945466553228253710noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-555274650815496201.post-64903235517570372912011-03-27T16:58:29.645-04:002011-03-27T16:58:29.645-04:00I liked it a lot. I can really since the struggle...I liked it a lot. I can really since the struggle she is having in trying to save her friend. I think there is an interesting between the way she came and the way she left. I am as well confused with why the bride part is there. Otherwise it is a good excerpt.Pure Awesomehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03459466406468025817noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-555274650815496201.post-65080840370194809452011-03-26T12:32:30.955-04:002011-03-26T12:32:30.955-04:00I like it. I get a clear image of the events takin...I like it. I get a clear image of the events taking place, and I also feel for the character. <br />I would suggest for you to go into a little more detail about what lobotomy is, but at the same time I feel like it wouldn't match the tone of the story and seem out of place. <br />The bride part seems very out of place to. I honestly have no idea what that means. Though honestly it's the only problem I can really find.Super Robot Attackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09115964205796780996noreply@blogger.com