tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-555274650815496201.post6375104767999480158..comments2023-07-05T05:03:33.255-04:00Comments on Publish, or Perish!: Publish or Perish 2/25-Ghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14945466553228253710noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-555274650815496201.post-32359433503002072452011-03-07T22:45:09.880-05:002011-03-07T22:45:09.880-05:00More detail into the cocaine addiction would help....More detail into the cocaine addiction would help. It'd be nice if the reader could really put themselves in her position as an addict. Also, her "perfect" cheerleading life pops up and then goes without any elaboration, I don't know if thats done somewhere else in the story, but if not it should be added to bulk up the character's background. This topic has a lot of potential - I think you just need to dress it up a bit.lalanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-555274650815496201.post-1004426742359644902011-03-05T10:37:52.478-05:002011-03-05T10:37:52.478-05:00I think it was ended a little too soon. I would ha...I think it was ended a little too soon. I would have liked to learn more about what exactly happened on her downward spiral. You might want to write about a specific instance your character went through during the "few weeks" she was skipping her classes. I think you could definitely benefit from adding more detail about her behavior during this time period as well.Dyannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18320087296372148966noreply@blogger.com