tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-555274650815496201.post6788624088154658639..comments2023-07-05T05:03:33.255-04:00Comments on Publish, or Perish!: Evil-Ghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14945466553228253710noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-555274650815496201.post-23891270108832060772010-09-26T15:20:08.914-04:002010-09-26T15:20:08.914-04:00If you were to add some backgroung information tha...If you were to add some backgroung information that could be helpful. Maybe a bit more detailed. I like the concept though. Maybe you could make it longer, and try to stretch it out a bit moreTaylor (:https://www.blogger.com/profile/09128675683127875731noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-555274650815496201.post-31357189480809697662010-09-24T21:04:52.133-04:002010-09-24T21:04:52.133-04:00The clothes the people are wearing should have a l...The clothes the people are wearing should have a little more descriptive. The trash bag and paper outfit had to be uncomfortable, maybe you should describe that a little bit?Shannon Sawyerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07601900358735092483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-555274650815496201.post-46949296152611551962010-09-24T15:10:56.348-04:002010-09-24T15:10:56.348-04:00I like the details.
A bit longer would be nice. M...I like the details. <br />A bit longer would be nice. Maybe a fight with the clothes? The red/black eyes is really creepy and made me do a double take of my own clothes. Perhaps you should discuss how the fear of the clothes is making the main character feel?Chrissyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12684775030085333496noreply@blogger.com