There was a girl named Gia and a boy named Charles. They thought they were soul mates but one day Charles decides to go to a different country where his family lives. He wants to go for three months the last time he went there was for his grandpa funeral. This time it’s for no reason to go there so he ended up going there. Gia didn’t like this at all because they had just started to get their life together a she was very sad. So he was writing on facebook that he got a girl pregnant down there and that she was like 2 months Gia didn’t think it was funny that he wrote that. So he called here the next day she flipped out on him he said he only did it to see what people would say. She also heard that he was talking to other girls trying to get with them she didn’t like this at all. Every day when he was gone she wouldn’t be doing nothing but go to school and go to boys and girls club than home sleep and so on an so forth. So she got mad a broke up with him than he came back went on his knees and begged for her to come back to him. She felt bad but she didn’t want to fall for it he obviously don’t care for her that much so she left him an moved on with her life.
I think this is a good start but it should be expanded. Also the grammar is slightly poor so I would read over it again. Three months is also a little to long a time period for a short story. This is a good story and I would like to read your next draft.
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