The nihts are silent, filled with harmonies peace
The body is calm and ready to seize
It's time to approach this certian peice
Your life is screaming out "Do something please!"
Change is what is needed for success
The ability to run without fear
In the fluffy clouds I feel no sudden stress
I will scream out to this world for all ears
This act of feeling like you're winning
Become the biggest accomplishment ever
The constant changes keep your head spinning
Show them you will not give up what so ever
You cannot fall, this time beauty shines through
No more time for feelings of being blue
What do you think?
This is a very good piece of poetry. The rhyme scheme is good, although it doesn't hit sonnet form til the second stanza. It was a bit confusing for the sonnet to start AAAA then suddenly BCBC. After that, it keeps good form. I liked the poem, it was very nice and I enjoyed reading it. I'd like to see your other work.
ReplyDeleteIt's good but you might want to go over it again to check for spelling errors. It's interesting. The rhyme scheme is confusing but I guess it might have worked depending on what style you were using for the sonnet.
ReplyDeletethat. was. BEAUTIFUL! loved it.
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