Yeah, let's just pretend it's still Friday, shall we? My bad. Anyway, this is a poem I wrote the other day simply because I needed to write it.
Just smile and
Pretend to care
It’s all she has
She just can’t bear
The pressure’s building
The beauty fades
Her heartbeat squeezes
She eyes the blades
Its not the answer
She knows this well
The tears spill over
She needs to yell
Curl up in the corner
Hug your knees tight
It’s just a nightmare
No need for fright
A new morning dawns
The teenage girl rises
Files away the dream
Puts on her disguises
She smiles and
She pretends to care
It’s all she has
She just can’t bear So here we are. Question: Does this flow well? Do you have any suggestions for improving it?
It is a good poem but i think some of the words dont flow that good together.
ReplyDeletesome points dont go but otherwise it's definitely good.
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