This is a poem I wrote for Exercise 35. Let me know if you dig it or not. Does it flow well? Any changes to make it sound...sweller?
I will shred like no tomorrow
Ass, this I shall kick
I'll be glorified eternally
Without a baseball or a hockey stick
I'll make waves
With power chords, I will pwn
I'm beyond a dork
Like a god I will own
Never underestimate the power of the dorks
Us geeks and freaks
Guess what? We're bad-asses
We're epic win at it's peak
This poem was farily well written. It got better as I continued to read through it. It's pretty entertaining to read, however the first stanza could be imporved as I find it hard to find the reading flow. Then the first and second stanza does not relate to the third one, or atleast I dont think it does. I hope this helps.
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