I wrote this for writing exercise 22. It is a lovely story about a girl, Andrea Sarasin, who suddenly turns into a man! Is this story funny or too far? Does it need more detail in the beginning or the end? Holla @ me
There was once a girl named Andrea Sarasin. Nobody liked her because she was always eating everyone else's food and farting. One day, she was walking to class when she suddenly got a funny feeling in his stomach. She stopped and for a minute she thought she was going to be sick. But then she realized that she was turning into.....a man. Everything changed and when she looked down, she had no boobs and her jeans were tight around her crotch. This is so embarrassing! She knew her mustache was getting a little out of hand but this is just uncanny! She ran home out of straight embarrassment and hid in her basement. She stayed there for the next three days. After three days had passed she decided to make the best out of the situation. She changed her name to Andrew and moved to the Netherlands where she would live as a struggling musician until the tender age of 77 when she would die of a foot tumor.
wowwwww. my life is complete because i have read something from you! i cant belive she farts on people who farts? :)i really enjoy this i dont find this over the top at all i like this alot. i really like everything, and the flow of how it just goes so smooth. i enjoy that it is very funny and i find it very funny and amusing. keep doing your thing and im so proud of all the great things uve done. u should deff read some of mine cause ive commented on urs so hmu dog. good looks on the writing i enjoy it! the nonly thing i have a problem with is u just suddenly end it, ellobrate more go more into detail and it would literally b perfect! again i enjoy everything you write and i admire your style of writing! good stuff dog. i love u!
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