Their first kiss ended in bumped noses and giggles, i went in for the kiss and we started laughing. When she laughed, i was a little weird out, i didn't know what she was doing so i was like "ehhhh, is everything OK?" She says "yes, you kiss like a god damn monkey." " Excuse me?!?!?!" as i'm baffled to what she said because im pretty sure kisses like a god damn arangatang on drugs. I was like oh hell no bitch, get out i unlocked the door and kicked her out cause i was appolled, i started away and i realized it was april 1st, her favorite thing to celebrate. I go back to her and apolgize im and she says " Oh my god im so sorry! I thought you knew."
Do u guys like this or do u find it to bleh?
This is a cute lil story haha. Its something that could really happen which is good. I feel like you could go more into detail on how embarrassed or pissed off the guy and the girl in the story probably were after this wicked awkward first kiss. And was the girl a really bad kisser? Or did he just say that because she called him about kisser and he has an ego problem? haha. It was funny though! I liked it
ReplyDeleteHI JOSH! Okay, first question. Do you speak English? As of now, I'm concerned. The story does, however, have a cute and fun vibe. I really enjoy the primate references. I end up asking myself the question, "How do monkeys kiss?" The April Fools thing is a nice way to end it. I liked the plot and it seemed to flow pretty nicely. I think you need to capitalize your letters and all that stuff. I'm embarrassed for you because you lowercased your "I" more than once. To answer your question, I do not fidn this to be "bleh." I agree with Nora in the fact that I want to know if the girlie is actually a bad kisser or he was just pissed. Also, maybe you could go on to say how pissed the chick was after. I mean, her boyfriend just told her she was a terrible kisser and kicked her out of the car.
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