Chief reached out and touched the door knob. This was the tradition of the fire bison people of Winnabago 9 a planet similar to earth. On this planet there are very few doors this was because every door on the planet on the planet was broken and could not be opened except, of course, the magic door and it's magic door knob. This door was opened once a year on Grand Cherokee day when the sun and moon met in the sky and all would go dark. Today was Grand Cherokee day and the chief was opening the magical door by turning the magical door knob. In reality the door was quite normal and was only referred to as magical because of it's close relationship with the magic door knob. The chief twisted and pulled the magical door knob and the magical door slowly creaked open. The entire village watched in amazement as the door opened to reveal absolutely nothing. The crowed cheered. The chief continued this tradition for years until a passing door repair man beamed down and fixed all the doors on the planet for free as part of his ongoing life mission to be a nicer person.
I think that you should have something exciting happan when the door opens since there such a commotion about what will happan when it's used. I also think the repair man's appearence was a bit out of place seeing as there was no previous mention of him. The idea that you used was amusing though. Try adding more and editing this.
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