October 6, 2011
Times a Wasting
Standing, legs start to shake. The cold winds run down your spine, all of your body is chilled. A sweet burning sensation is formed on the skin. Keep moving to keep the bodies heat. The roads getting longer as one step is taken. It seems like hours since this journey began. Finally arriving to your destination. A door is standing right ahead. Charging the door, hoping that when you open you will be struck with warmth by a lively place. But it doesn't seem to happen that way. This place isn't lively at all. As you step in a long corridor is surrounded by a graveyard. These stones catch your eye due to the names upon them. They seem familiar, ones once spoken. The people who mean the most are now names on stone. Theres an uncomfortable feeling rising in your stomach. This place is not where you want to be. As you walk faster and faster to end this nightmare. While traveling through the ending of this unfortunate scenario, one grave appears through the mist. Bracing yourself you approach it. There is a name imprinted on it. The name that is on the stone is the one owned by you. Confusion and intimidation begin to flow through your mind. This stone has a significant time and date on it. The date seems to fall on this current date, 5 minutes in the future. Only one thing left to do, apoligize for every sin done in your lifetime. The time counts down quickly, so many flashbacks. Things I haven't thought of in years are coming to me. Now only one minute is remaining, two knees hit the ground. You lift your head up to have clear view of the sky. The time runs out and suddenly your body is released to the sky.
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Dead and not knowing it...i hate when that happens...love the story
ReplyDeleteHAHA right, it's just the worst. But shes not dead in the beginning just the end.
ReplyDeletei know that....you sit next to me -_- duhhhh
ReplyDeleteKid, you so deep :) I really enjoyed reading this hun. It gave me some vivid imagery and a concept to soak up. You always seem to write with this innate sense of telling an honest story. Some of my main critiques aren't really related to the writing itself. Just make sure you come back and look at the work you posted here on the blog and revise spelling/ grammar mistakes. Another point of criticism was in the story. There was an awkwardly phrased line. It went like, "As you walk faster and faster to end this nightmare. While traveling through the ending of this unfortunate scenario, one grave appears through the mist." There probably shouldn't have been a period, probably a comma. Other than some small little fixes, your writing always tells a meaningful and emotional story. You've got a story to tell and I love taking a gander at your work and watching what you have to say unfold. You're awesome <3
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