October 7, 2011
The Adventure
There was a man who went on a hike to mount washington one day. He packed his backpack with food, extra clothes, waster, and a flashlight. He left his house in the morning before the sun came up. It took him an hour to just drive to Mount. Washington. When he got there he packed up his things and started on his hike. There's signs that are on the path that tell you which direction you should be going in so you don't get lost. The man decided to follow the yellow trail. On the way up the trail though he realized that the yellow signs stopped and he was lost in the woods....
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Oh the mystery of completing an adventure story. My suggestion is to make the character go on an unexpected quest. Make him save some STD riddled princess from a giant fire-breathing turtle in a castle. Then it turns out all the things he packed come in handy or something like that. Maybe he eats a mushroom and he grows giant and then eats a flower and can breath fire? Something original like that. What's important is that you keep the reader entertained and interested. Give your reader a twist or purpose to keep them going.
ReplyDeleteThis has really good potential for being a good story. There are some mistakes in it that you might want to fix. The man put waster in his backpack. I'm assuming that was supposed to say water. Also, there's signs should be changed to there are signs. There is would only work if there was only one sign. There is a sign or there are many signs. I think that after the man realizes he is lost in the woods, there should be a second character introduced. Someone should jump out at the man, preferably a crazy person. The man could run away from the person, or decide to go on a journey with the person, even though he knows that the person is crazy and that he can't really trust him. I feel like the new character would be like a donkey type, from Shrek. That would make the story really funny. IF you wanted to make this a scary story, the man could disappear, and then you could tell the story of what happened to him.
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