May 20, 2011

Hopeful signs

If it is a sign
For us to be together
Then let us begin.

Does it make sense? How can i make the topic more clear?

1 comment:

  1. I'm pretty sure I understand what point(s) you're trying to portray, but in my opinion, this is written in a vague way. One way you might be able to clearify the topic, could be by adding a few short lines about what the "hopeful signs" actually were, and if I were you, when doing this, I'd try to paint profound images, but still saying only the minimum amount possible. Hope I helped!

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