February 3, 2012

part of exersise 2

The pastry chef makes amazing pastries for all of the stores in his town. He makes cakes, cupcakes, muffins, you name it he'll make it! However a man named Brandon starts to go insane! He eats all the pastries and gets addicted to them like it's his own drug. He eats them all then noticed there's no more! The pastry chef is afraid to leave his house because he looks outside and there's Brandon! Brandon has a gun and is ready to shoot the chef if he goes outside. So the pastry chef runs all around his house and locks everything! His windows get locked and the blinds get closed. The back, front, and sun roof doors get all locked with dead bolts on all of them.

how can i make this sound more exciting to the readers?

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