September 28, 2010


Greene likes how the first stanzas have 4 syllables per line, do you think i should change the last 2 stanzas so it all flows? Can you picture each event as it happens?

he took the gun
he hid it close
behind his back
so no one knows

with a mask
he hid his face
down the road
to his father's place

they owned a store
bout' three blocks away
they will be robbed
today's the day

their son turned nuts
all crazy in the head
he ran off with cash
his father was dead

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