One morning Bob woke up for school. He hadn’t slept much the night before and was very tired. He began his usual routine and got up out of bed. He brushed his teeth and decided that it was time to get dressed.
He walked over to his closet and opened the door. When he first saw all of his clothes, something weird happened. He picked up a shirt and suddenly felt nervous. He threw the shirt across the room, ran out and slammed the door.
Breathing a sigh of relief, Bob walked downstairs. There was a pile of folded laundry on the table, and the sight of the clothing almost made him pass out with anxiety. He ran into a different room and huddled in the corner wondering what was wrong with him. Why was he so afraid of all of his clothes? The more he thought about it, the worse his fears became.
I can clearly visualize what is going on here and I like the detail. What I would do, is add some more to the second paragraph when Bob is picking up his clothes. Maybe you could say something about what the clothes are doing, because it kinda seems like Bob is just afraid of his clothes for no reason..
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