January 13, 2012

Haiku

Cold ice white wet snow
My hands were completely numb
Where are my black gloves

2 comments:

  1. nice. good and to the point. I liked that I can easily picture the environment and see the purple, numb hands before my eyes. I can imagine the hands, tingling before me as I complain about where my black gloves could be. It is a very good haiku that uses short words that allow me to perfectly envision what the poem is describing. Good job writing it, if you were trying to put an image in the reader's head they could relate to, mission accomplished.

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  2. Quick and simple haiku, I think that this haiku could get a bit more detail or paint a more vivid picture.

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