December 16, 2011

She Lost her heart to the fog

"It's over." Brian said. Ashley could barley see his face though the thick fog.
"Over with what?" She asked, holding her breath. Sje doesnt understand whats happening. THey were just going on a waqlk through the park, it was foggy out Brian and Ashley favorite weather. She never expected that this would come with a simple little walk. She looked up at him, he hadnt move. She could see his mouth it was in a straight line/ Ashley wanted to hug him and him say it wasnt over, but she knew he never would.
"Us," he fubally said after a long pause "we're over."
"But-" she started looking up quick, she stopped her words because he was already walking away. She fell on her knees looking down on cement. She could barely breath, she dropped hitting her face on the floor and refuse to get up or wipe off the dirty on her face, she lost her heart to the fog.

3 comments:

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  2. You may want to check your post over for spelling and grammer errors before you add more. You could add more to the beginning and explain what led them to meet on a foggy afternoon in the park.

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  3. I would check your spelling and grammar before you post, but this would be an interesting story. Lead up to how they got into the fog, and describe how she really feels about loosing this boy.

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