This is a writing exercise I came up with by myself, due to being absent in class. Let me know how you like it and what more I can do or say to improve it.
He sits there and observes her as she goes along with her own business like she is the only person there. He ignores the other students as they socialize, going on with their immature behavior, throwing things and hitting each other with rulers. He doesn’t say anything to anyone. He stares hard wondering what’s going through her mind. Why had he been so interested and intrigued by her? It was something more than her beauty.
She glances up every now and then, feeling drawn to look at him. She can feel his stare. She wonders what he is thinking about and why does he keep staring at her. She also wonders why he stays silent, letting the other students act like monsters. She doesn’t put too much thought into it though. She takes one last glance at him; she can see the mechanics working in his head. So she goes back to her own work.
i like this story alot, and i think you did a really good job portraying both of their thoughts. but maybe with the sub you could add something like "i've never felt this way about any of the students before." maybeit'll help the readers know the type of person he was. this small piece made me want to continue reading, you did a great job.
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