This is a writing exercise where we could do whatever we wanted, this is what I did. Responses?
Twas the first night of Hanukkah
and all through the night
There were rats in the apartment
They were a terrible sight
The candles were lit and the prayers had been said
Other than the lights the room had seemed dead
The gifts had been opened, unwrapped with ease
Enjoying their presents, the children were pleased
As the candles extinguished, the lights did wane
For the next seven nights, they would be lit again
I like this a lot! I love Jews first of all. You guys are my favorite kind of people. You may think I'm joking but I'm not. My best friend's a Jew and my favorite Jew is Woody Allen. Alright, now that I've got that out of th way I can get to the point of things. I liked the Twas The Night vibe of the poem. The whole Hanukkah idea with it works well. It's descriptive and I felt like I was there in the moment of such a joyous holiday. Just a question but why were there rats in the apartment? Just seemed a little random but not too questionable. The rhyme scheme seemd pretty solid. Overall you wrote something really meaningful and interesting. Coming from someone who celebrates Christmas, this poem makes me want to enjoy what it would be like to spend the holidays with some awesome Jews and experience their culture.
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