March 18, 2011

4th Short Story Excerpt

“It’s just a dream, it’s just a dream,” I whisper to myself, repeating the phrase several times, hoping to make the phrase a reality. I know all too well that my dreams have an uncanny ability to come true when I wake up. I sit down on the edge of the toilet seat and bury my head in my hands.

Since I was a young girl, I thought that my dreams were special. I would see aspects of my life one night, and when I woke up the next morning the day would unravel just as it had in the dream. I thought it was a coincidence for years, or just a trick that my mind was playing on me. Sometimes it worked to my advantage; I saw myself meeting George, moving into our house, and giving birth to my son. Other times, like when I saw the death of my father, my gift was more of a curse. And no matter how much I tried to prevent it, the dreams always came true.

Do you think this is too out there or unrealistic? If so, is there any way I could change it to make it more believable?


  1. I don't think it is too outlandish or unrealistic. It seems really interesting and makes me want to read more. Also, this seems like a solid, timeless concept for a story. Other stories have been successful with it and with your own unique spin, it could definitely work. I wouldn't change anything about this excerpt.

  2. The idea is perfectly believable-in the short story world, that is- but I find it a bit cliqued and unoriginal, since I've trawled across many precognitive dream stories before. (The Gate-Keepers series by Antony Horowitz is an example). However, this idea is by no means too bizarre, and is perfectly usable.