i stared at my severed hand, my dad just got out of jail. hes been a nut case the last few years. he went to jail for killing a teenage girl we all new he was guilty, but there wasnt enough concuring evidence to make him innocent. he got so mad stabbed me in the hand for no reason, i run to my room call 911 they say 2 minutes for the police, my dad comes in with a shotgun and attmpts to shoot me, policd comes thru and tazes him to death.
what is everyones thoughts?
This is an interesting story idea but unfortuantely, your grammar and spelling isn't the best. Go back and fix your errors, and also, elobrate your fathers jail sentencing and have his story intertwine with your hand being severed. Have it flow, it would make for a better and more easy reading.
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