Does this sound good to you?
My secrets hide behind my mask
they crawl out when you're not watching
and shatter the girl you know.
You'll never notice them,
because they hide when they see you.
They're afraid you won't like them,
and you'll run away.
They get angry
because they want you to know about them,
but I refuse.
I need you to keep them away,
so they stop hurting me.
They aren't nice -
They cause me pain.
Do you want that?
It's interesting. I like how you're giving your secrets emotions and personalities. It's a new look on how secrets effect us all and how we all feel towards them. I also like how you say that secrets want to be known but we all hide them.
ReplyDeleteI like the theme of this poem and the description is lovely. However, I think some of the lines should be revised so that they flow easier like if they were spoken out loud.
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